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Anon Amoose
Anon Amoose
4 years ago

Well, this is a movie now. I hope OP got money for this.

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Me.
5 years ago

Powerful.

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FreakyFaithReads
5 years ago

Not creepy due to many spelling and grammar errors. 1/10. I do however challenge someone to make a story off of this submission and improve upon it or for the original author to do this themselves. It is always interesting for an author to update a story they wrote long ago. It is equally as interesting to see another writer twist it their own way.

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MetallicaFan
6 years ago

Woah, freaky
4/5

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1encoded1
6 years ago

short and awesome

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Moonshine_Utilizer_ls
6 years ago

As someone who struggles to enjoy lengthy pastas, I really appreciate short ones that capture the essence in just a few words.

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CRIMSONBEAST
6 years ago

i can not believe that simple 5 lines can be this creepy .. nice job

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goldentay
6 years ago

I would scared for near death if something like that happen to me

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Dragonlordmikey
6 years ago

Omg they are twins.lol can’t believe that happened. I give 10/10 it’s amazing. I’m wondering what will happen to the kid under the bed.

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iMeloyNyan
6 years ago

Yes, they’re twins