I begin tucking him into bed and he tells me, “Daddy check for monsters under my bed.” I look underneath for his amusement and see him, another him, under the bed, staring back at me quivering and whispering, “Daddy there’s somebody on my bed.”
I begin tucking him into bed and he tells me, “Daddy check for monsters under my bed.” I look underneath for his amusement and see him, another him, under the bed, staring back at me quivering and whispering, “Daddy there’s somebody on my bed.”
Well, this is a movie now. I hope OP got money for this.
Powerful.
Not creepy due to many spelling and grammar errors. 1/10. I do however challenge someone to make a story off of this submission and improve upon it or for the original author to do this themselves. It is always interesting for an author to update a story they wrote long ago. It is equally as interesting to see another writer twist it their own way.
Woah, freaky
4/5
short and awesome
As someone who struggles to enjoy lengthy pastas, I really appreciate short ones that capture the essence in just a few words.
i can not believe that simple 5 lines can be this creepy .. nice job
I would scared for near death if something like that happen to me
Omg they are twins.lol can’t believe that happened. I give 10/10 it’s amazing. I’m wondering what will happen to the kid under the bed.
Yes, they’re twins