Hide and Seek


My son and I often play games, he’s five years old so our games can range from pirate battles in the middle of the ocean to simple board games like snakes and ladders.

Today we decided to play hide and seek.

I counted to fifty while he went to hide in one of the three hiding places that he always picks.

‘Ready or not, here I come’ I called, as I slowly made my way to the sofa. I looked down and there he was two little feet sticking out from behind the sofa, accompanied by muffled laughter.

Oh, I can’t find you anywhere!’ I explaimed, knowing that the idea that he’d hiden well would cause him to jump out of his hiding place in excitement.
‘Right’ I said ‘time for bed’

As I tucked my son into bed and kissed him good night, a small figure appeared at the bedroom door.
‘Mummy,’ It whispered ‘you didn’t come to find me.’

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eyelessJack378 avatar
6 years ago

really good. I enjoyed it very much.

LeSoleilNoir avatar
6 years ago

What I like about this is the fact that you (the reader) don’t know which one is the imposter

Lisa Argon
Lisa Argon
6 years ago

Amazingly cute but creepy, good job! Wish it was more complex though, but the simplicity does a lot for the story.

TheMadGamer avatar
6 years ago

I like the ones that make you think.

Dragonlordmikey avatar
6 years ago

I like the story but was confused why did the kid ask about the mother. Did the mother leave the child. But besides that the story was short but sweet or creepy and sad.haha lol pls keep writing.

Eminems avatar
6 years ago

i loved the story it defo gave the creepy factor you need, i would advise to slowly transition to the bedtime rather than it suddenly cut off. For example say something like, “Later that night i’m tucking my son into bed when suddenly…” etc. Keep up the good work! 🙂

TheCreepLord avatar
7 years ago

And then she found 5 dollars

7 years ago

lacking important transitional elements, and crucial details pertaining to the time and why they were suddenly from play mode to bed mode but it’s got a solid foundation in the main idea:
-play hide and seek with kid
-find kid
-tuck kid in later
-kid comes back like what the fuck mom you didn’t find me as the parent tucks in some kind of interdimensional shapeshifting kidbeast

MayaRose avatar
7 years ago

Very creepy indeed

CrimsonBLOOD avatar
7 years ago

Aww, I want to cry. :,( I love it; I love pasta’s that are tiny but it’s all in there. 10/10