Masterpiece

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I’ve been lying down for hours now. It’s 5:35AM and there’s not much I can do. You know what the worst part about my situation is? I’m in the same room with my parents. They keep looking at me, and I can’t help but look back and try not to cry or scream. Their eyes are focused on me and their mouths are wide open. There’s the strong scent of blood and I feel so paralyzed with fear.

Here’s the thing. The second I make any hint that I’m not asleep anymore, I’m completely fucked. I will die and there’s nobody around to save me. I’ve been trying to think of a way out but the only idea I have is to rush for the door and run outside the front door and scream for help, hoping any neighbors hear me. It’s risky, but if I stay here, I’ll surely die. He’s waiting for me to wake up and see his masterpiece.

You’re probably wondering what’s going on. I do get ahead of myself sometimes.

About three hours ago, I heard screaming from the other side of the house. I got up and went to check on the noise before realizing I had to use the restroom. Instead of doing the smart thing and investigating, I used the bathroom first. I could’ve gotten myself killed right then from my stupid actions. But I actually did my business and took a peek outside the bathroom. There was blood on the carpet. I got very worried and ran back to my room, hiding under my sheets like the pussy I was. I tried to convince myself to go back to sleep, that it was just some really vivid dream or something.

But I heard my bedroom door open. Like the terrified child I was, I peeked from under my blankets to see what was going on. I could see something dragging my dead parents into the room. It was not human, I can tell you that. It was hairless, with no eyes and no clothing. It walked like a caveman, with its back slouched as it dragged my parents. But this thing was much smarter than any caveman. It was aware of what it was doing.

It propped my dad up on the edge of my bed, and made him face me. It then sat my mother down in the chair and positioned her towards me as well. It then started rubbing its hands upon the walls, staining them with blood and then drew a circle with the devil’s pentagram in it. This thing had made what it would probably call a masterpiece. To finish it off, it scribbled a message onto the wall that I could not read in the darkness.

It then positioned itself under my bed, waiting to strike.

The scariest thing is now, my eyes have adjusted to the darkness since then and I can read the message on the wall. I don’t want to look at it, because it’s terrifying to think about. But I feel I need to see, before I’m killed.

I peek at the creature’s masterpiece.

“I know you’re awake.”

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Endy
20 days ago

this is why i put junk under my bed. Monsters can’t hide there if it’s already full. (though it might have not been the smartest idea of me to keep my bow and arrows there too)

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AnimeFan2.0
1 year ago

JACK READ THIS! I LOVED IT! Great job!

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O O F
5 years ago

ok so a longtime ago i seen this being read by jacksepticeye on youtube and i clicked random pasta and it took me to this and i started reading the first sentence and i thought this seems familiar but i shrugged it off and so i keep reading and i’m like wait i saw this on youtube and before that i was like i just plain screamed it in class too i just said I KNOW THIS ONE and so i go search it up on youtube and i seen that jackaboy read it for the camera and i was just like OMGGGGGGGGGGG so yeah how’s your day

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hippo_crit
6 years ago

Definitely when I hear a blood curling scream, all I think is,”wow, I need to take a dump!”
Interesting pasta though

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foxyalicorn
6 years ago

and this is why i sleep six feet off the ground

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Cassidy
6 years ago

Fantastic. The ending is brilliant. The peeing thing makes no sense, and serves no purpose, just cut that part out. Also the protagonist seeing blood and thinking they should go back to sleep? Nonononono. Protagonist should peak around the corner, see the creature, then run and hide under the covers.

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MissSpookycat
6 years ago

Even though many say this is a good pasta, it isn’t. It’s like a complete rip off of “The Message”

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Jaydis19
6 years ago

The ending made up for the bathroom part. That was a bit too much of a stretch for me but again, the ending was well done and I liked the descriptions. Just noticed a few times where the tenses would change but nothing major, those are a common mistake and there wasn’t enough of them to distract from the short story.

[spoiler] the creature itself was described well and certainly sounded like a ghoul people would fear during bedtime. The way it laid the parents out was disturbing as well. [/spoiler]

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Twiple
6 years ago

got me :c

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calamity
6 years ago

This is the best story I’ve ever read.

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1encoded1
6 years ago

very solid read! Well done!

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Alpha111803
6 years ago

[spoiler]well crap i heard a scream but i have to crap. What one is more important [/spoiler]

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mykill19
7 years ago

quite good 🙂 didn’t quite freak me out though but i like the unique story line and villain 🙂

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Cyberthriller
7 years ago

Honey, grab the shotgun! There won’t be any sleeping tonight.

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Will_Dean109
7 years ago

Nice pasta 10/10

Dodododood
Dodododood
8 years ago

Damn,,, scary as af

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Fofy
8 years ago

Great job. I thought it was quite fascinating

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geardeath
8 years ago

I mean when you have to go you have to go.

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WitchingHour
8 years ago

I like the buildup, the twist, and the uniqueness of the monster, all in such a short story.

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IAmBread
8 years ago

Well, it was a bit casual for one. And who says, “oh, I hear someone scapreaming, but hell, I need to piss first.” Any way, 9/10 breads!