The Itch

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It all started with a slight itch on the tip of my right middle finger. I absentmindedly scratched at it, and continued playing Minecraft. I soon forgot about it entirely, as a Creeper blew up the house I had worked on for an hour, as Creepers often do. I cursed and began to rebuild.

My rebuilding took me long into the night, as I had to gather more supplies. When I looked at my phone, the clock said 2:30 am! It was time to crash, or I would be useless in the morning. I slept well, without any dreams. Only sweet blackness.

I awoke feeling refreshed, eager to start the day. It wasn’t until I gripped my shirt that I felt a stab of excruciating pain from my finger. I stared in shock. The tip was black and a foul white liquid was oozing from a small hole. What the fuck? How had this happened?

I frantically scrubbed it clean, moaning in pain and disgust as I squeezed it slightly. The pus flowed out of it, coating my sink with a nasty smelling slime. I grimaced and squeezed harder. Something popped, and the pus spurted in my face. I dry heaved immediately, nearly falling.

Frantically I wiped my face clean. I’d need to take a long shower to get through this shit. Still the finger oozed, though more slowly this time. Blood began to seep out of it as well, so I poured peroxide over it and bandaged the wound. Much better.
However, my satisfaction at this was short lived. The true horror came when I lifted my shirt.

My stomach was nearly covered in black sores, each leaking that same despicable slime. I couldn’t hold it back anymore. I vomited everywhere. To my shock, I had thrown up more of the white stuff. What was happening to me? Am I going to die?

It was then that I felt the powerful, screaming itch all over my body. I began to scratch, taking chunks of flesh with each scrape of my nails. I couldn’t help myself, don’t you get it? I couldn’t stop!
There was blood and pus everywhere. The room was beginning to fade.

I blacked out, and when I came to- you were the first person I saw. I don’t understand why you’re looking at me like that, don’t you see the fucking sores?! They’re everywhere!

Official report:

YOUNG MALE, APPROXIMATELY 23 YEARS OLD TAKEN INTO CUSTODY. IN ROUTE TO PSYCH WARD FOR EVAL. SUBJECT IS CLAIMING SORES ARE ALL OVER HIS BODY. NO SORES IN SIGHT, BUT HE HAS NEARLY SCRATCHED HIMSELF RAW. POSSIBLE DRUG ABUSE.

Pat (last name censored)
01/02/2015

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Mrs.Brightside
6 years ago

Well… it wasn’t horrible, but the pasta wasn’t perfect. You had a lot of potential when the story began, but it was sent directly down hill. I understand you tried to compact it from a fifteen page story, you could’ve made it a bit larger to keep the climax going longer. 3/5

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MetallicaFan
6 years ago

Woah, what a freaky quick story, love it
4/5

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Foxfire
6 years ago

…now this one is interesting, particularly because its not entirely implausible. Especially if you focus on the very real horror that is experiencing various parasthesias and neurologic misfires.

There’s actually a pretty a well-known medical incident of a woman scratching into her brain due to a persistent ‘phantom’ itch from about …a decade or so ago? This kind of horror feels very in the same vein for me.

I think the focus on the gross-out factor is somewhat overdone – the way it was described distanced me from the narrative, I mean – but depending on how that’s written next time, it could prove jarring in a good way. It just seemed too…descriptive eww for the audience, not present-active-thoughts if that makes sense? (Tho i recognize the challenge here, evoking body horror is hard!)

I look forward to reading the updated version.

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AlpSun
6 years ago

Pretty boring not much of a plot twist or anything really spooky. There was some ok details . . . keep writing and try to get better!

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ViolentViolet666
6 years ago

Booooring

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Omfi
6 years ago

Pat is actually a minecraft YouTuber

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LolerioNark
6 years ago

Loved it :3 It was super gross but cool.

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great pasta. loved the ending

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MKO4VVW
7 years ago

that went from a 2 to a 10 pretty quickly…

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kylemcpasta
7 years ago

I liked the story, it was a good idea and a fun ending. I feel as if it did stop at the climax, and I’d like to read the 15 page version.
Nonetheless, good job.

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AbbyTheHoe
7 years ago

Great pasta! Fits perfectly with the ‘Madness’ tag. 8.5/10

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CreepySean5235
8 years ago

Nice. The Doctor would approve. Also, just to say it, DIE DALEK, DIE!!!!

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Th3D0kt0r
8 years ago

i named my creepypasta The Itch as well……
http://creepypasta.org/pending/the-itch-4#
does this comment count as spam now?

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KillerKat
8 years ago

Ew awesome but ew XD

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ThKllrRckr
8 years ago

I loved the basic story plot. If it was fleshed out a little bit more it could be a stellar story.

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stgrlee45
8 years ago

This processed a little fast. Leaves me wanting a more detailed story line.

Ann2015
Ann2015
8 years ago

Need something further, explaining the sores…

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OmegaDark14
8 years ago

lol I read this to my friend and she gagged! Yes!