If you are reading this, turn your lights off before you continue. They are attracted to light because they know someone is alive in the room.
I call them shredders. They will shred any form of life they come in contact with. Don’t be fooled by their human appearance. They only seem human, with their expressionless face and slow, steady pace, but their eyes grow wide when they see life and they can’t help but murder them with their long sharp nails. They will start with your face, ripping it to shreds. Then your neck. After that, you’re dead so you can’t feel the rest. But they shred you until you are a pile of rotting flesh.
I know this because I survived an attack of the shredders. My family wasn’t so lucky. The only reason I survived is because I thought of a way to stop them. I got a picture of my mother and held it out in front of my face. They can’t kill what is already dead.
Their footsteps sound like leaves crackling because of the way their bones rub against each other. If you hear this noise out your window, don’t worry, there may be time to save your life. Hurry and grab a picture of one of your family members before they get to your room.
I bet you’re thinking “What? My family is alive and well!” Are you sure? When was the last time you checked on them?
Pulls out photo of cat
“Hahaha u can’t kill me yet!”
“Hmm let me think ur cat is upstairs Alive and well, alive and your the first person I see so uhhh!”
“OH GOOD I’M SCREWED!!!!!!”
Unique
Usually you turn on the lights before a scary story!
*LOL*
Your really good you should try to write more if you don’t already
Cute.
to choppy
it was a grate idea but it could have been longer to add some suspense to the story line.
To bad I’m in the middle of class right now
I personally really like this pasta. The concept of a good story is one that keeps your attention, and one that you cannot predict the next thing that will happen. This did both for me.
Also, a creepy-pasta that makes you turn OFF the lights, bravo!
I liked it,but I agree that there isn’t much story. Maybe a sequel is in order?
If they can’t kill what’s already dead, why do they continue shredding you after you die? How does the writer know the order of what the shredders shread? How are shredders able to identify and remember faces but not realize that the person is holding a picture? And also, Demon3, you wouldn’t be able to visit them every day and learn that they are friendly. Even if you held a dead mans picture in front of your face, the shredders apparently left after the writers face was hidden, so they would avoid you. Furthermore, can they only see faces until they attack? If so, I can just hide ,y face without needing a family picture. And as long as a shredder sees that someone’s dead, no shredder will attack the same face?
Good pasta you nailed it. Also if I see a shredder i’m calling the ninja turtles! XD
hehe actually they are pretty friendly… believe me I visit them everyday now
I liked your monsters. But there was no real story. It was so vague you couldn’t get lost in it, you know? Keep the monsters, make a story. Happy writing.
It lacks the certain way of the creepypasta but i could deftly see this as a movie except for the kill your family part. I would love to see a movie about these monsters.
It almost made me turn off the lights. Somewhat unique in a way that other stories will ask you to turn them on instead of the other way around.
honestly? is everyone commenting on this (besides PolisKanin) 5 years old?
worst one yet. no ACTUAL story and just a lame concept for a monster.
Me: *puts photo in front of face*
Shredder: “Oh, hello rotting pile of flesh. Carry on being dead, now.”
Nailed it.
the ending is what made it good for me
This is 5 year old level of “scary”/creepy.