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The Little Girl in the Red Cape

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The Little Girl in the Red Cape

A little girl’s parents went out for a business dinner so they hired a babysitter to watch her.

“Can I have some ice cream?” the little girl, Holly asked after supper.

“Sure” the babysitter, Beatrice said. “Where’s the freezer?”

“In the basement, so are the nuts, cherries and candy and stuff.”

When she went down to get the ice cream, she looked out the window to see a little girl standing outside. This didn’t strike her as too suspicious and she simply brushed it off.

After she had given Holly her ice cream, Holly asked, “Can I have some hot fudge on this, please?”

“Course,” was the quick reply.

After Beatrice went back down into the basement to retrieve the hot fudge, she looked back out the window to see the same little girl, only wearing a red cape. She absentmindedly wondered if the girl was playing dress-up as she trudged back upstairs.

“Got it,” she deadpanned after setting the hot fudge in the microwave and putting the thick chocolate goop on the ice cream.

“Can I please have some nuts on this please…?”

“Really?”

“Puh-lease?”

“Fine…” she sighed already heading back down the stairs. As she got the nuts out of a small cabinet in the wall she looked back out the window to see the same little girl in the red cape, holding a knife.

As she ran upstairs she decided she was calling the police.

“Ooh Thank you!” Holly squealed happily from her perch on her pink Disney Princess booster seat.

“Uh-I-I yeah. Hey, Holly, I need you to-“

“Oh no! Can I have a cherry on top, please?”

Not wanting to alarm Holly, she decided that she would go get the cherries, then call the police after locking herself and Holly in the bathroom. There’s no way the little girl could get inside if the windows and doors were all locked.

After slowly descending down the stairs, she opened the freezer with shaky arms. Daring to peek out of the window, she closed her eyes before staring out it. The same little girl, in the same red cape, holding the same knife was there. Only the knife now had blood on it.

Running up the stairs, scared of what might await, she checked on Holly. Holly was dead, a small pool of blood forming on the floor under her. She ran into the bathroom and locked the door behind her before dialing 911.

When the police arrived, the tearful mother and father were with them. The mother approached Beatrice, sobbing uncontrollably. “What happened?”

“Oh God- I’m sorry oh God! I-I saw this little girl with this red cape and a knife outside your basement window!”

The mother said, “We-we don’t have any basement windows, only mirrors…”

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ThirtySev
6 years ago

i too am happy that the annoying little girl was gone… he he ;P

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Brayden1403
6 years ago

My first thought when I read the ending, was OH SH*T!!!

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ViolentViolet666
7 years ago

Yea this is pretty overdone.. at least this is one of the GOOD versions of this rehashing

Garous
Garous
7 years ago

I know it’s horrible but I’m glad that Little Red Riding Hood had decided to kill the annoying spoiled girl

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GrimmBullet
7 years ago

Decent story. The ending was a little hard to swallow. I find it difficult to believe she wouldn’t know the difference from indoors and out if it truly were a mirror.

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omg that is scary I’m not looking out my bedroom window OR any windows after reading that *sivers* but i read it out load to all my sisters and brothers we all LOVE IT

AnotherWriter
AnotherWriter
8 years ago

That chill at the end though
Eventhough I knew what was coming
Really well written
Keep up the good work

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spawnofcthulhu
8 years ago

Can’t say I was too crazy about this one. The dialogue felt a bit stale and didn’t make a lot of sense, why wouldn’t the girl just say what she wanted all at once? I know kids can be strange like that, but I think it was a bit too much. Not to mention I don’t understand how a mirror in a basement can be mistaken for a window, not once, but several times. I liked the concept but I think it needs to be executed better.

TheOnePotato
TheOnePotato
8 years ago

Ur ma gurd it was amazing 10/10

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The_One_Potatoe
8 years ago

Jeez

TheOnePotato
TheOnePotato
8 years ago

Loved this, It’s short simple but effective very tasty.

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Areyousiana
8 years ago

Lol I know this story from the heart!!!!!! Jaajajaajaja I love it

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ILoveIt332
8 years ago

wtf

Hannah
Hannah
9 years ago

This is so scary! A little too urban legend but still a good and scary story

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Outlaw13
9 years ago

I really like it! Yeah there are some vague parts, but that’s where the reader’s imagination comes in!

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creepypastaluvr
9 years ago

so creepy! i seriously cannot stop reading it

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vishussvixen
9 years ago

it is written well enough, though honestly the concept is confusing as hell. if it was a ghost, and i am just going on the assumption that it was, maybe there could have been even a slight cue to that or maybe a dash more setting. it would have made the story more powerful, in the final reveal. still classic though, and still good.

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NatalieClockwork
9 years ago

I love this story! I read this every day and I have memorized this. I creep out my friends by telling them it.

5/5

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xSemira
9 years ago

This wasn’t terrible. It spooked me enough for a reaction 3/5

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Omg this is awesome :O !!! 10/10 c: