Afterdeath

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The pain ended quickly. I rose and tried to find my body. Probably lying mangled underneath the metallic wreck. Dying in a road accident is definitely the worse way to go.
“So! Had a nice life?” asked a voice behind me.
I turned around to find a woman smiling. Since she could see me I was pretty sure she was a soul like me.
She giggled, “You are taking it pretty well. I am Cindy by the way.”
I spoke evenly,” What happens now? Hell? Heaven?”
She laughed louder.
Before I could say something I heard a commotion from far off.
Cindy shouted,” COME ON!” And she ran.
She turned and yelled,” Have you been good?”
“What?”
“Have you done any good while you lived?”
Totally confused, I spluttered,” I…I donated blood once.”
As we reached the source of noise I was dumbstruck to find hundreds of people ripping each other apart in front of a hospital.
I shouted, “WHAT IS HAPPENING HERE?”
Cindy replied, “Someone is giving birth here. These souls are fighting to get inside the new born shell.”
“But the baby…”

“LISTEN TO ME…THERE IS NO BABY UNTIL A SOUL PENETRATES IT… If no soul makes it inside, the shell is pronounced dead by doctors.”
She continued, “Your fighting strength depends on your Karma. So the soul of a rapist or a paedophile etc. stands no chance. They will never get a shell and will painfully wither away.

Children are most dangerous. Pure souls. Stay away from them during fights.”
“But what about heaven… and hell?”
“THIS IS HELL! And more importantly, the life you left behind… That is heaven.”

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Nightmarrionne
5 years ago

So if you died during childbirth…

…would you be able to give birth to yourself…

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haha amazing story. loved the concept as well

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HexWitch21
5 years ago

Jesus Christ This is dark af

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CreepsMcJunior
5 years ago

Good way to put death. Keep up the good work.

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FreekyPotato
6 years ago

Wait a second, I thought life was Hell
When you die is when you go to Heaven
Life is a LIE!

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FreekyPotato
6 years ago

Wow…
When I die…Do I really just want to climb back inside a baby?
Also gives me a new perspective on babies…
Mother: I had a baby!
Father: No, you had a shell for dead people to climb into… Congragulations

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Sloan
6 years ago

Very interesting angle on the afterlife. Heard, read, seen countless renditions of what happens after we die but this is a new one. Thanks for sharing!

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checkyourcloset999
6 years ago

BEST. CREEPYPASTA. EVER! INFINITE OUT OF TEN

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Pale Horse
6 years ago

Really creative! Like really! Great job! I would love a sequel! Like a fight between our character and a child

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Osoro
6 years ago

It was kinda short, but its really good so i guess thats okay.

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1encoded1
6 years ago

Cool idea, would have liked it to be longer

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ice
6 years ago

eye opener pasta here

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LolerioNark
6 years ago

Well crap. First of all, I feel bad for the children who are dead. I’m also kinda afraid that if this is what the afterlife is like, I’m pretty much screwed. I’m not a rapist or pedo but I’m kind of bad and haven’t really done anything good yet.

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candypants
7 years ago

Wow!! That really fucked my mind!!

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OMICRON1AN
7 years ago

this is a good one i was bamboossled

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TheEdgyOne
7 years ago

Existential crisis at its finest

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Lemonade5tand
7 years ago

Very creative, I have a similar outlook on life.

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sidedartifact
7 years ago

well it`s better than just disappearing I suppose

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joannaaaabanana
7 years ago

twisted. 10/10

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DiamondCevert
7 years ago

Cool and freaky …. And totally out of the ordinary . So of course I loved it!!! Brilliant work and loved the style!!
10/10